Saturday, 23 November 2013
Tuesday, 19 November 2013
Friday, 15 November 2013
Storytelling Unit - Second Script Overview
Hello, this is my overview of the second draft of my script, enjoy the video! Ensure to follow below with the two embedded items.
Monday, 11 November 2013
Sunday, 10 November 2013
Storytelling Unit - Pre Production, Script feedback
So I did my first draft of the meeting, Simon really liked it! Which is always good, a pleasant surprise to what I was expecting. The feedback essentially says that the script osnt the best but the main story element works great, im happy with that. Heres the link.
https://www.dropbox.com/s/z19wf00ljfrypcw/The%20Meeting%20-%20First%20Draft.fdx
Now I can work on tinkering with tbe last parts of the script, and moving on to my video!
Story Telling Unit - Pre-Writing Part 2
I had a tutorial with Simon to discuss how far I'm into my project and how I'm doing on the course. I feel passionate about the course and am enjoying it so far! I definately think that I'm not going to be a screenwriter but as Simon said, there's other units on the course that I may find enjoyable for me than screenwriting. Not saying I hate it, but it's 'not my cup of tea' so to speak. Anyway, to the critique of the project.
I spoke about the overall pitch and it went well, but I needed to make it more believable, so here's what I formulated based on that.
The hook - Two homeless people looking for a place to stay
Problem - They find a woman on the ground,
Cliff hanger - she needs help
Tension raises - billy wants to do something, but jimmy says no and tries to take charge of a situation he can't control, a role-reversal from earlier in the story.
Moment of truth - billy carries it out himself
Climax - they take the woman out and phone the police and an ambulance
Resolution - jimmy respects billy more as a person and vows he'll never underestimate him The rest of the story is essentially the same, except the pair are homeless, gives the vacant house a sense of purpose and believability. One f the two is an ex paramedic, which the other doesnt know, this gives more of an insight into how he deals with the case.
I spoke about the overall pitch and it went well, but I needed to make it more believable, so here's what I formulated based on that.
The hook - Two homeless people looking for a place to stay
Problem - They find a woman on the ground,
Cliff hanger - she needs help
Tension raises - billy wants to do something, but jimmy says no and tries to take charge of a situation he can't control, a role-reversal from earlier in the story.
Moment of truth - billy carries it out himself
Climax - they take the woman out and phone the police and an ambulance
Resolution - jimmy respects billy more as a person and vows he'll never underestimate him The rest of the story is essentially the same, except the pair are homeless, gives the vacant house a sense of purpose and believability. One f the two is an ex paramedic, which the other doesnt know, this gives more of an insight into how he deals with the case.
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